Student |
Subject |
Grade |
Class |
Words |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Mariyah Wilson | english | 10 | period 2 | 1222 |
Essay Summary:
Fitzgerald’s “The Great Gatsby” explores societal pressures on women in the pursuit of the American Dream. Characters like Daisy and Myrtle represent the limitations and expectations placed on women in the 1920s. Women faced challenges such as limited choices, social expectations, and pressure to conform to wealth and status, ultimately restricting their true potential. The novel portrays how women were silenced, dependent, and vulnerable, highlighting the impact of societal expectations on their lives.
Essay Grade:
Rubric
| Criteria | Score | Explanation |
|---|---|---|
| The paper focuses on a clear and relevant aspect of the chosen prompt. | 4/5 | The essay presents a focused analysis on the societal expectations and gender roles of women in “The Great Gatsby,” which is relevant to the prompt. However, it could benefit from a deeper exploration of how these aspects specifically relate to the novel’s broader themes. |
| The thesis statement is clear, concise, and directly addresses the chosen prompt. | 3/5 | The thesis attempts to address the prompt but lacks conciseness and clarity in its formulation. It could be improved by more directly stating how the novel portrays the impact of societal expectations on women. |
| The thesis effectively outlines the main argument about the theme and its development in the novel. | 3/5 | The main argument is somewhat outlined but lacks a clear roadmap for the analysis. The essay would benefit from a more detailed thesis that outlines the specific aspects of gender roles and societal expectations to be analyzed. |
| The paper demonstrates a strong understanding of the novel through insightful analysis. | 3/5 | While the essay demonstrates an understanding of the novel, the analysis often remains on the surface level. Deeper insights into how Fitzgerald critiques societal norms through his characters would strengthen the paper. |
| The analysis is well-supported by specific textual evidence from the novel and other scholarly sources. | 3/5 | The essay includes textual evidence from the novel but lacks integration of scholarly sources. More varied evidence and integration of critical perspectives would enhance the analysis. |
| Evidence is integrated smoothly into the writing and effectively supports the claim(s). | 3/5 | While evidence from the novel is present, its integration is sometimes awkward, and the support for the claims could be more effectively articulated. |
| The writing is clear, concise, and easy to follow. | 3/5 | The writing is generally clear but occasionally lacks conciseness and precision. Streamlining sentences and focusing on clarity would improve readability. |
| Ideas are logically organized with strong transitions between paragraphs. | 3/5 | The essay’s organization is adequate, but transitions between paragraphs can be improved for better flow and coherence of ideas. |
| The paper uses proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling. | 3/5 | There are several grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the essay that detract from its overall clarity. Proofreading and editing are needed. |
| In-text citations are formatted correctly in MLA style. | 4/5 | In-text citations are mostly correct, but there are minor inconsistencies with MLA formatting. Attention to detail in citation formatting would improve the paper. |
| Works Cited page is complete and formatted correctly in MLA style. | N/A | As the Works Cited page is not provided, this criterion cannot be evaluated. |
| All sources are properly cited throughout the paper. | 3/5 | While the novel is cited, the lack of scholarly sources and occasional citation errors suggest a need for improvement in source integration and citation. |
| The paper meets the assigned length requirement. | 0/5 | The essay does not meet the minimum word count requirement of 1500 words, which significantly impacts its depth of analysis. |
| The paper is formatted correctly with a title page, double spacing, and proper font size/margins. | N/A | Without information on the formatting details such as title page and spacing, this criterion cannot be evaluated. |
| The paper demonstrates a thoughtful and well-developed analysis that goes beyond basic plot summary. | 3/5 | The paper attempts to go beyond plot summary, but the analysis would benefit from deeper exploration and more critical engagement with the text and its themes. |
| The writing is engaging and demonstrates the student’s understanding of the novel and its themes. | 3/5 | The writing shows an understanding of the novel, but the engagement with its themes could be more compelling and nuanced. |
Total Score: 37/65
Suggestions for Improvement of Structure, Grammar, Vocabulary, Content Length, and Tone
- Revise the thesis statement for clarity and conciseness, making sure it directly addresses the prompt and outlines the essay’s main arguments.
- Enhance the depth of analysis by incorporating more detailed textual evidence and scholarly sources to support claims.
- Improve transitions between paragraphs to ensure a logical flow of ideas throughout the essay.
- Conduct thorough proofreading to correct grammatical, punctuation, and spelling errors.
- Extend the essay to meet the minimum word count requirement, allowing for a more comprehensive exploration of the topic.
- Ensure all sources are correctly cited in MLA format and integrate scholarly perspectives to strengthen the analysis.
Suggestions for Topic-Related Improvements
- Deepen the exploration of gender roles and societal expectations in “The Great Gatsby” by analyzing how these themes impact other characters and the novel’s outcome.
- Incorporate critical analyses or theoretical frameworks related to gender studies to enrich the essay’s argument.
- Examine the historical context of the 1920s more closely to better understand the societal pressures faced by women during the era depicted in the novel.
- Consider comparing the experiences of the novel’s female characters with those of women in contemporary society to highlight the relevance of Fitzgerald’s critique.
Essay:
In today’s world, women are faced with many societal pressures and limitations. As women, they face many challenges in order to live up to expectations set by society. Women used to have to follow behind men in order to live up to the American Dream. The American Dream is an idea that every citizen shall have the equal opportunity to achieve success and overall have a better life. F. Scott Fitzgerald explores this topic through his literary fiction, The Great Gatsby. Fitzgerald does this by using women, such as Daisy, Myrtle, and Jordan, to represent many of the flaws held up by the upper class. Fitzgerald does this to help portray them as dependent, vulnerable, and incapable of certain things. The women in The Great Gatsby are faced with challenges such as limited choices and social expectations; As women, they are stereotyped to be someone who they are not, which are seen in their beliefs, behavior, and attitude. The Great Gatsby uses these expectations to pressure the women to try to live up to certain expectations, such as wealth and status, ultimately restricting them from realizing their true worth and potential, which exposes how these restraints help shape the characters. This helps perceive them to be vulnerable, helpless, and ignorant to their surroundings.
Daisy Buchanan’s life, despite wealth and privilege, exemplifies how societal expectations for women in the 1920’s shaped how they are presented from other’s point of view. In chapter 7 of The Great Gatsby, Tom Buchanan, Daily’s husband, often spoke for Daisy when it came to certain things like expressing her opinion. Instead of letting her say what she felt, he budged in thinking she wasn’t capable of expressing whatever she felt the need to say, leading others to believe she was a fool. Tom explained that “The trouble is that sometimes she gets foolish ideas in her head and doesn’t know what she’s doing.” He nodded sagely.” (Fitzgerald 131). Fitzgerald aligns perfectly with this message that women were observed as objects of wealth and status. An example of this is when Tom “knew that Daisy was extraordinary, but he didn’t realize just how extraordinary a “nice” girl could be. She vanished into her rich house, into her rich, full life, leaving Gatsby — nothing.” (Fitzgerald 149). Trapped in this loveless marriage, Daisy really had no voice. When it came to expressing how she felt about things, Tom always jumped in to speak for her because he thought she was just a foolish girl who did not know what she was saying, and therefore had to listen to any and everything he tells her to do. Here’s an instance of social expectations for women. Women are expected to do what they’re told, and if they choose not to, they’d be punished by these overpowered men. Women were basically servants to their husbands, or maternal figures to their children. They were expected to be caring, obedient and passive to whatever should/would happen. Daisy’s story helps readers understand how wanting to pursue the American Dream and achieve great wealth and status can ultimately make women feel trapped and unfulfilled with their lifestyle.
Myrtle Wilson wasn’t a very wealthy woman, but due to trying to fit in with society’s expectations, it led her to a tragic downfall. Myrtle was married to George Wilson, who was pretty poor. Myrtle is very materialistic and loves luxurious things, so she ends up having an affair with Tom, which helps her gain some wealth and a better social status. Myrtle’s living room “was crowded to the doors with a set of tapestried furniture entirely too large for it, so that to move about was to stumble continually over scenes of ladies swinging in the gardens of Versailles (Fitzgerald 29). Based on Myrtle’s living room, you can tell how badly materialistic she was, and how’d shed hrd things just because she liked thm. In order to be considered of great status, women would turn to wealthy men, notwithstanding whatever consequences might have come with it. Even though Myrtle was in a marriage with someone who truly loved her, she still turned her back to be with someone who had better status, more money, and could provide her with better things. Back then, every woman’s desire would be to be more wealthy or they’d often yearn to have a better life. With “better life” came more privileges, so of course women would want to elevate their statuses like Myrtle did in order to get what they wanted. Trying to conform to these standards can result in not being happy with what you really want, and stopping yourself from knowing your true worth and potential.
F. Scott Fitzgerald uses Daisy, Myrtle, and Jordan to symbolize how women back in the 19th century would resist these injustices. The term “New Woman” was created in the 20th century during the time where social expectations for women were shifting. The term was used for women who resisted to abide by gender roles, bias, and unfair opportunities. Hyuns believed that the novel abounds “with minor female characters whose dress and activities identify them as incarnations of the New Woman, and they are portrayed as clones of a single, negative character type: shallow, revolting, exhibitionist and deceitful” (1). Women similar to Daisy, Myrtle, and Jordan would usually play the role of being a housewife, child provider, etc. As time progressed, the term was created, and women learned to resist these rules. They realized that it was sexist, and women can do just as a man could do. Social status didn;t matter to them anymore because they could create and build off their own. The “New woman” term helped build their confidence and show their independence, all while fighting for equality and gaining empowerment over their rights.
Although there were many symbols throughout the book, Fitzgerald uses Daisy to help portray how these restraints from social expectations can affect a woman. Daisy was often silenced and put into a category to make her seem like a fool. Instead of speaking up for themselves back then, women wouldn’t talk back, whatever they were told to do, they’d do. Tom thinks “She does, though. The trouble is that sometimes she gets foolish ideas in her head and doesn’t know what she’s doing.” He nodded sagely.” (FItzgerald 131). Despite Daisy having a mind of her own, she never had a chance to speak up for herself. Tom always spoke for her, strictly believing she didn’t know what he was talking about, and that she should stay in her place. Here goes to show how men expected women to act. The society was so messed up, that these women were treated like servants, and only were allowed to do what they were told.
In sum, social expectations have a big impact. The characters in this novel strive to fit into the upper class society, meet wealthy standards, and overall have a luxurious lifestyle. The novel helps highlight how one can get so washed up with trying to pursue such a lifestyle by using sacrifices to get what they want. He also highlights how women are expected to conform to certain gender roles, be restricted to limited actions, and face consequences for not obeying what they are told.