ClassX Video Lessons Youtube Channel Teaching Without Frills How to Write an Imaginative Narrative for Kids Episode 7: Revising Your Story
I’ve written a really great fantasy story, but I’m ready to make it even better. Revising is about making changes to improve your story. You might add more information or details, change parts to make them more interesting or descriptive, or even remove things that don’t quite make sense.
The first step is to reread your story, one part at a time. Try to think about it from a reader’s perspective. You can ask yourself: Does that make sense? Is it interesting? Can I add more details to make it better?
Here’s my introduction. First, I’ll reread and think about those questions. Megan had been at a birthday party all evening and hadn’t noticed that the weather was starting to get worse. I could probably choose a more descriptive word than “bad,” right? How about “stormy”? She began walking, hoping she could make it home before the weather got worse. I think I could add a detail here. I’ll say she was walking quickly. Soon it was dark. The rain was pouring, and she saw lightning flashes reflecting off the tall buildings around her. Hmm… this part sounds kind of wordy and confusing. I’ll just change “began noticing” to “saw” so it’s easier to understand.
She was worried. “Uh oh, maybe I should fly instead.” Megan didn’t like to use her superpowers all the time, but she decided that flying might help her get home more quickly and safely. Hmm… she was worried. Sometimes it’s better to show how someone feels with actions rather than just tell. How can I show that she was worried? How about, “She was trembling”?
She started spinning around to transform into Super Megan and then took off flying into the air. Now my introduction is even better. I’ll continue this process with each part of my story, and you can too. Remember to reread each part and think: Does that make sense? Is it interesting? Can I add more details to make it better? Your imaginative narrative will be even better.
It’s always smart to edit after you write to make sure you don’t have any mistakes. Check out these editing videos and more on the Teaching Without Frills channel, and don’t forget to subscribe! Thanks for watching!
Story Detective: Become a story detective and find a favorite book or story. Read a short paragraph and think like a reviser. Ask yourself: Can you find a word that could be more descriptive? Is there a part that could use more details? Share your findings with a friend or family member and discuss how these changes could make the story even better.
Illustrate Your Story: Draw a picture of a scene from your story. Think about the details you included in your writing. Does your picture match the words? Are there any details you could add to your story to make the picture clearer? Use your drawing to inspire new ideas and add them to your story to make it shine even more.
Feelings Charades: With a friend or family member, play a game of charades using emotions. Take turns acting out different feelings like “worried,” “excited,” or “surprised” without using words. The other person has to guess the emotion. Afterward, talk about how you can show these feelings in your story through actions instead of just telling them. For example, instead of saying “she was worried,” you might write “she was trembling.”
**How to Write an Imaginative Narrative for Kids**
**Episode 7: Revising**
I’ve written a really great fantasy story, but I’m ready to make it even better. Revising is about making changes to improve your story. You might add more information or details, change parts to make them more interesting or descriptive, or even remove things that don’t quite make sense.
The first step is to reread your story, one part at a time. Try to think about it from a reader’s perspective. You can ask yourself: Does that make sense? Is it interesting? Can I add more details to make it better?
Here’s my introduction. First, I’ll reread and think about those questions. Megan had been at a birthday party all evening and hadn’t noticed that the weather was starting to get worse. I could probably choose a more descriptive word than “bad,” right? How about “stormy”? She began walking, hoping she could make it home before the weather got worse. I think I could add a detail here. I’ll say she was walking quickly. Soon it was dark. The rain was pouring, and she saw lightning flashes reflecting off the tall buildings around her. Hmm… this part sounds kind of wordy and confusing. I’ll just change “began noticing” to “saw” so it’s easier to understand.
She was worried. “Uh oh, maybe I should fly instead.” Megan didn’t like to use her superpowers all the time, but she decided that flying might help her get home more quickly and safely. Hmm… she was worried. Sometimes it’s better to show how someone feels with actions rather than just tell. How can I show that she was worried? How about, “She was trembling”?
She started spinning around to transform into Super Megan and then took off flying into the air. Now my introduction is even better. I’ll continue this process with each part of my story, and you can too. Remember to reread each part and think: Does that make sense? Is it interesting? Can I add more details to make it better? Your imaginative narrative will be even better.
It’s always smart to edit after you write to make sure you don’t have any mistakes. Check out these editing videos and more on the Teaching Without Frills channel, and don’t forget to subscribe! Thanks for watching!
