ClassX Video Lessons Youtube Channel Teaching Without Frills Opinion Writing for Kids | Episode 7 | Revising Your Writing
I’ve written my opinion about my favorite book, The Tale of Peter Rabbit. Now, I’m ready to make it even better by revising! Revising means looking at your writing again to see how you can improve it. The first thing to do is to read your writing carefully. Ask yourself, does it make sense? Did I use strong words? Did I give enough details? If you think something could be better, it’s time to make some changes!
Let’s start with my introduction. First, I’ll read it again to see if it makes sense. Do you like books about animals? If so, you should read The Tale of Peter Rabbit by Beatrix Potter. It is a fantastic book! That sounds much better. I think I should add more details about the book, so everyone knows what it’s about. It’s a story about a naughty rabbit named Peter, who doesn’t listen to his mom! He is supposed to gather blackberries with his siblings, but instead, he sneaks into a garden and gets into a lot of trouble! Much better. Now, let’s move on to the next part.
I think The Tale of Peter Rabbit is a great book because it has adorable characters! For example, the little bunnies are named Flopsy, Mopsy, Cotton-tail, and Peter. They are fluffy and wear cute clothes! Also, parts of the story are silly, like when Peter sneaks under the fence to get into the garden. Hmm, I think I will change “really cute” to “adorable.” That is a much stronger word! Let’s see what’s next.
I also love the illustrations! The pictures in the book are beautiful and colorful. Lastly, kids can learn a lesson by reading this book! Peter learned that he should have listened to his mom to stay safe! Can you think of a word I could use instead of “really pretty?” Hmm… I think I’ll say “beautiful” instead!
Here is my closing. I’ll change the boring words I used into the new stronger words I picked! Let’s see how it sounds. Doesn’t The Tale of Peter Rabbit sound like a fantastic book? The characters are adorable, parts of the book are so silly, the illustrations are beautiful, and it can even teach you a lesson! If this sounds like the type of book you might like, check it out at your local library! Perfect! I am almost finished! Only one step left: editing my writing.
Character Dress-Up: Choose your favorite character from The Tale of Peter Rabbit and dress up as them! Use clothes and items you have at home to create your costume. Once you’re dressed up, think about how your character might feel or act in different situations. Share your character’s story with your family or friends, and explain why you chose them. This will help you understand the characters better and think about how they are described in the book.
Illustration Creation: Become an illustrator! Draw your own picture of a scene from The Tale of Peter Rabbit. Think about the colors and details that make the illustrations in the book beautiful. After drawing, explain why you chose that scene and what you like about your illustration. This activity will help you appreciate the role of illustrations in storytelling and how they can enhance the story.
Word Swap Game: Play a game where you swap “boring” words for “stronger” words, just like in the article. Write a simple sentence about your day, then find words you can change to make your sentence more exciting. For example, change “happy” to “joyful” or “big” to “gigantic.” Share your new sentence with a friend or family member. This will help you practice revising your writing to make it more interesting and engaging.
**Opinion Writing for Kids: Revising**
I’ve written my opinion about my favorite book, *The Tale of Peter Rabbit*. Now I’m ready to revise! Revising means making your writing even better. The first step is to reread your writing. Ask yourself, does it make sense? Did I use strong words? Did I give enough details? If you answer no to any of those questions, you should change your writing to make it better!
Here is my introduction. First, I will reread it to see if it makes sense. Do you like books about animals? If so, you should read *The Tale of Peter Rabbit* by Beatrix Potter. It is a fantastic book! That sounds so much better. I’m also thinking I should add more details about the book, since the reader might not know anything about it! It is a story about a naughty rabbit named Peter, who doesn’t listen to his mom! He is supposed to gather blackberries with his siblings, but instead he sneaks into a garden and gets into a lot of trouble! Much better. Now let’s reread the next page.
I think *The Tale of Peter Rabbit* is a great book because it has adorable characters! For example, the little bunnies are named Flopsy, Mopsy, Cotton-tail, and Peter. They are fluffy and wear cute clothes! Also, parts of the story are silly, like when Peter sneaks under the fence to get into the garden. Hmm, I think I will change “really cute” to “adorable.” That is a much stronger word! Let’s see what’s next.
I also love the illustrations! The pictures in the book are beautiful and colorful. Last, kids can learn a lesson by reading this book! Peter learned that he should have listened to his mom to stay safe! Can you think of a word I could use instead of “really pretty?” Hmm… I think I’ll say “beautiful” instead!
Here is my closing. I’ll change the boring words I used into the new stronger words I picked! Let’s see how it sounds. Doesn’t *The Tale of Peter Rabbit* sound like a fantastic book? The characters are adorable, parts of the book are so silly, the illustrations are beautiful, and it can even teach you a lesson! If this sounds like the type of book you might like, check it out at your local library! Perfect! I am almost finished! Only one step left: editing my writing.
